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#1 elenat

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Posted 22 May 2017 - 06:23 AM

I've stared at this picture for far too long, and I don't even know what to fix anymore. I think I've overdone something... and yet something is lacking? 

This is far outside the kind of edit I normally go for (natural) but the original had basically no lighting so I decided to have fun with it to practice bring out some drama in the sky. 

Does it work? What's wrong with it? 

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f/3.5, 1/4000, iso 160 (was using P mode... I know - should have stopped down the f stop) 

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Posted 22 May 2017 - 08:24 AM

Hi Elenat
Very dramatic sky indeed. I like it and I also like the touch of blue on the left.
I would have cropped it more on the left, removing the foreground branches altogether, and I'd also remove the rock in the water. Those both are distracting for me.
This looks it could have also been a good candidate for a long exposure to smooth out the water for an alternate look, but overall a nice and moody image!

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Posted 22 May 2017 - 09:01 AM

You have captured an interesting image with plenty to look at. It seems to me that the location has a lot of potential though in reality I am not a good judge as I do not have the artistic eye that some folk seem to be blessed with.... Yeah it is interesting though at times less can be more, your pic has me thinking about the using the leading line of the bridge into the area of sky just above the trees that also seems interesting.... So your image caused be to contemplate it`s content.... therefore it works...?  (-:

 

Yup those sliders are so easy to use and the magic of that which they can create can all turn to ..... !!!  Leaving one in total confusion.... Think Chelsea`s vids will perhaps provide a good foundation in the learning process, though I have no personal experience other than the way they approach photographic education on the show....  



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Posted 23 May 2017 - 04:31 AM

Thanks for the tips and feedback, guys! 

 

When I have the time I might have a drive down there and give it another try :) It was actually a nice day when I shot this, but when I took this specific shot the clouds rolled in creating flat light. But I figured I could work with it haha

 

And yeah, moving those sliders are addictive. After a while I lose myself into just messing with the sliders to see what they do, not actually getting anywhere haha... 

 

Thanks again! 



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Posted 23 May 2017 - 04:58 AM

Was slow is contribution because I couldn't see anything wrong with it.

Mark and Geedee's input seem on the money



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Posted 23 May 2017 - 10:37 AM

I like the image.  The colour tone is very effective and consistent with way you've captured the clouds.  Two points to consider:  The first is the fact that the shadows are completely crushed on the far shore.  I would like to see more tonal contrast and I think it would make the image a bit more interesting if I could get more detail of what's going on in the shadows.  The second is the composition.  If you plan to go back and take another crack at it I'd like to see the near side of the bridge beginning more to the left of the frame, perhaps emerging out of the lower right corner or perhaps even further to the left.  The problem for me is that my eye settles on the blank space that is most of the photograph and is the least interesting.  I'd like my eye to pick up the leading line of the bridge right away and be directed to what is most interesting and why you're taking the pic.  So maybe give that a try and see how it goes.



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Posted 23 May 2017 - 08:39 PM

The second is the composition.  If you plan to go back and take another crack at it I'd like to see the near side of the bridge beginning more to the left of the frame, perhaps emerging out of the lower right corner or perhaps even further to the left.  The problem for me is that my eye settles on the blank space that is most of the photograph and is the least interesting.  I'd like my eye to pick up the leading line of the bridge right away and be directed to what is most interesting and why you're taking the pic.  So maybe give that a try and see how it goes.

 

That's it!! That's probably what I thought was lacking from the image. Couldn't put my finger on it haha. Thanks so much.

And yes I'll fiddle around with the shadows and see what I can do with it. :) 



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Posted 26 May 2017 - 06:24 AM

Very beautiful image. However, the sense of space is awesome with cloud patterns and the bridge creating beautiful leading lines that build up to a ......sorta missing subject. I say sorta because the image is so good it really doesn't need anything else but you always want to find that pot of gold at the end of those leading line. Is there somebody that can build a lighthouse or something? We photographers have needs you know!
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